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   07-27-2008, 7:18 AM
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this is a goodbye but read in between the lines
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This just isn't for me the way that i live the way that i feel i have nothing to give you mean nothing to me this is so hard to say i couldn't stand to be with you for one more day so i'll write a letter and tell everyone why you have to go you have to die this isn't about you i swear that it's me you've done all that you can it's just not meant to be i know what they'll say how selfish i am but they don't get it they just don't understand i tried to be happy to have a smile on my face but not this time and not this place i'll miss you a little but not enough to stay i couldn't look in this mirror for one more day everyone is crying but i feel so right i'm so happy that i decided to do this tonight even though i'm gone you'll call me back again and maybe later we'll be better friends. **gold star to anyone who can guess correctly on the first try!** and i don't remember how to make the stanzas distinct so bear with me
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   08-20-2008, 6:10 AM
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Re: this is a goodbye but read in between the lines
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Okay....I liked this alot but the vibe I'm kinda getting from this write is suicide.  Is that right?  I maybe wrong but the reason I guess I keep getting that vibe is because my friend's brother just killed himself last week so...that could be just the vibe I'm on.  Well, an any case I really like this write.  Let me know what you were really saying if I was wrong.  Keep up the good work!!!
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   09-24-2008, 2:54 PM
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yeah it is about suicide...all the people i read this too assume it's about a person...but good for you! and sorry to hear about your friends brother =(
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   09-29-2008, 3:33 AM
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WOW!!!  I thought I was just reading too much into it.  What made you write this piece?....if you don't mind me asking.  I'm just wondering because besides my friend's brother I went through something personally myself.  This is a very good write.....
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   09-29-2008, 3:41 AM
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Okay wait, I just have one more question.....When you say, "....this isn't about you" are you talking about "Life"?  I know you said most people think you are talking about a person.....just trying to get a full understanding of this. 
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   10-30-2008, 7:48 PM
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when i say ..."this isn't about you i swear that it's me" i am talking about life...i am saying goodbye to life...what made me write this is over the past year i became really depressed that is how i released it
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